I'll make a huge series outta my novel- i will - i will - i will-
I swear it's my first-ever novel, but if anyone can — could someone just read a bit of it and gimme critique so that i could make fixes?
I'm only on chapter 6 in part 1, but I like it very much so far!!!!! My only concern is that I don't know what the main character looks like, but I assumed its intentional since it's in first person. Other than that I find the story very very interesting B))
WOW okay, this concept is super unique & I haven’t really come across anything like it before! Based on the bit I read, I'm really liking it. Huge props for getting it written down!
Okay heres the critique:
The MC is built different like hes not freaking out while the dude just got kidnapped. However if this is intentional thats completely fine. Next the transitions sometimes feel abrupt so maybe you could add a sentence or two to bridge scenes.
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I'm only on chapter 6 in part 1, but I like it very much so far!!!!! My only concern is that I don't know what the main character looks like, but I assumed its intentional since it's in first person. Other than that I find the story very very interesting B))
@secretevillair TYSMM- and yeah, the face shall be left anonymous, but my boi looks RADDD 😼
WOW okay, this concept is super unique & I haven’t really come across anything like it before! Based on the bit I read, I'm really liking it. Huge props for getting it written down!
Okay heres the critique: The MC is built different like hes not freaking out while the dude just got kidnapped. However if this is intentional thats completely fine. Next the transitions sometimes feel abrupt so maybe you could add a sentence or two to bridge scenes.
@pureoftheshirefolk TYSM!!!! Also, I'll keep that in mind!!!